Friday, 11 May 2012

Autumn



AUTUMN
                
                     1/5/12

The blustery wind blows the  
autumn leaves down from the
swaying thin tree,
the other leaves cover
the hard concrete  

As you walk through the leaves
you hear them crunching and cracking
until they don’t exist any more

The leaves waiting for the
wind to blow them off the
wonderful coloured  tree

I can see the beautiful
autumn fading away.



   By Joshua




WALT: observe and include specific details in our writing
SUCCESS CRITERIA

SELF ASSESSMENT
Includes four nouns (from observation)3/4
Made the nouns do something3/4
Started each new description on a new line:)
Extended each line so it makes more sense
(may include a who, where, why, what, when).
:)



1 comment:

  1. kool story like the word swaying.

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